First off, I don't mind this sort of stuff. BUT. This is pretty poor. It's really 2 dimensional. The same vocals (which are poor) with the same fuzz tone guitar. In fact, the instrumentalisation is pretty much what I was playing as a 14 y.o. in 1974. Throwing a few spoken passages in there doesn't improve the beast.
It needs light and shade. It needs a decent singer. Or, at least, decent lyrics.
I've often enjoyed your efforts in the WAC and latterly AAAC, Neil. But not this time. Too repetitive, too samey, too dull.